Bridget and I decided to write how to take care of your bunny. we decided to do how to take care of your bunny because we both had a lot of prior knowledge.
Great effort Eden and Bridget with this piece of writing. I like the way you were willing to take on feedback to make your writing the best it could be. Your next step in writing is to really think about your word choices and make them interesting and at a high level. Eden, working collaboratively with an older writing is really beneficial and I hope you get further opportunities to do so throughout the year. I look forward to seeing more of your learning posted on your blog! Miss J
I loved this piece of writing around caring for bunnies. Charlotte and I found this interesting as we have been discussing getting a pet rabbit but were unsure how much work would be involved in owning one. The way this information was presented was clear, in student language so Charlotte could understand and the pictures helped us to relate to what you were talking about.
Great effort Eden and Bridget with this piece of writing. I like the way you were willing to take on feedback to make your writing the best it could be. Your next step in writing is to really think about your word choices and make them interesting and at a high level. Eden, working collaboratively with an older writing is really beneficial and I hope you get further opportunities to do so throughout the year. I look forward to seeing more of your learning posted on your blog! Miss J
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ReplyDeleteI loved this piece of writing around caring for bunnies. Charlotte and I found this interesting as we have been discussing getting a pet rabbit but were unsure how much work would be involved in owning one. The way this information was presented was clear, in student language so Charlotte could understand and the pictures helped us to relate to what you were talking about.
Regards,
Amanda and Charlotte Bailey